Wednesday, September 23, 2009

I'll Pray For You

This is short I know it will be longer in the final format:


I was the only person left on the planet who didn’t have texting. I would come home for vacation and spend countless hours texting people from my dad’s work phone hoping it would annoy him enough to add texting to our family plan. There were times I came very close to accomplishing my goal but every time my mom walked into AT&T she would back out on me. I would come back to Provo without a texting plan and without any true sense of who I was. Ok, maybe this would be true if I were in middle school but I still tried as hard as I could to get texting added to my phone.

“You want me to be social in school right Mom?” I would try to use my lack of social skills as a push toward texting. My mother has always criticized me for my school, work, then bed schedule. My logic in this was only people who have texting get invited to parties. I didn’t say it was sound logic.

“You can text me anytime you want Mom.” That should have been the deciding factor. She could get a hold of me no matter what I was doing with my new found social life. In class? No problem, just send a text right?

“Everyone else has texting.” Bottom line I was desperate.

I begged and pleaded for a year and finally decided to give up or get my own cell phone plan. I wanted to do all I could to have my parents pay for it but texting was that important. My mom and I were sitting in the foyer at church the Sunday after Christmas talking about my desperate need for texting when the first counselor of the Bishopric came out of one of his meetings. He stopped dead in his tracks, spun around on one heal, and looked straight at my mom.

“This girl doesn’t have texting?”

Laughing my mom said, “No, she doesn’t need it.”

“Tina, every girl needs texting. Heck, I need texting.” He then opened a door to another meeting and paused to look at me, “I’ll pray for you and you will get texting.”

My mom and I just sat there stunned. Did he just say he would pray for me to get texting? I was pretty sure I had miss understood but the look on my mom’s face confirmed it was true.

“There’s no way that is going to work.” My mom looked at me as we both tried to hold in our giggles.

A week later I sat in the airport texting my mom. It would take her 30 minutes to respond but I did it just because I could. I could text anyone. Moral of the story? Prayer works.

7 comments:

  1. I'm anxious to read more! I'm curious to know now how texting affects people in the church.

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    When you write "Moral of the story?" Its a dependent clause, you might want to change it to, "What's the moral of the story?" But all in all, your narrative is great. You've got great tone, great detail, and I think it defines what a narrative is.

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  2. That is AWESOME! I love people like the counselor in your story. I am interested to hear more about why you wanted texting so much and when you first wanted it. Great start with a very engaging story!

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  3. Tone is light-hearted, willing to have some fun with their life. Very engaging.

    Definitely held my interest. The continued theme of "I didn't have texting and was desperate" was a playful theme to incorporate in your paragraphs.

    I especially love the climax of when the counselor came out, and how you tied it together at the end by saying "Prayer works"

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  4. I like the dialogue, especially since the main point of the story was a conversation.

    Here's some purely grammatical stuff. Comma use: when you are talking to Mom, set her name off with a comma.

    Heel as in the bottom of your foot is spelled with an 'e.'

    "Misunderstood" not "Miss understood"

    I enjoyed it. I still don't have texting, though...

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  5. Love it! Praying for texting- there's something for the Ensign. It's a great story and you conveyed it amazingly well. It flowed and had great rhythm. I hope that stays as you expand it for the length requirements.

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  6. Great story! I am interested to see how you develop the story to better complement the moral.

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  7. That is hilarious, straight up. It would fun to hear more about what you did when you finally got texting, and how your parents' minds changed.

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